我走到讲台前, 看了看摆在那儿的电脑,发现电脑上显示的还是于洋做陈述时用的资料,他刚刚走得匆忙, 忘记退出了。我轻轻滑动电脑的鼠标, 把他的文件关掉, 到我的文件夹里把我事先准备好的故事版调了出来, 并把故事版中的第一幅画投影到了身后的大屏幕上。
这时候会议室里突然就安静下来了, 我不知道到底是什么让大家安静下来的,我想大概是因为我刚刚投影到大屏幕上的第一幅画吧。他们大概是被画里的人物吸引了,我还真得感谢制作部的同仁, 他们把年仅5岁的Daniel画得真是太生动太可爱了,看到那样的孩子没有人会不喜欢。
“Let’s start with the first picture of the story board!”(让我们从故事版的第一张图片开始吧!”我的第一句话是这样说的。说来也奇怪, 此刻我的心情一点都不紧张, 不像上次为都市桃源案做陈述的那次, 那次我紧张都快断气了,这一次我的心情出奇的平静和镇定, 这也许是因为我事先做好了充分的准备,还也许是因为如今我的自信心大大增强了的缘故。于是在这份出奇平静和镇定的心情中,我用一种既恬淡又温情的语气开始了英文故事脚本的陈述:
A beautiful house, The bright room.
Daniel (a little boy about 3 years old) is playing a electronic train on the floor. His father is drowning the sketch as a designer on the table beside him. A dignified and elegant Enland watch put on the corner of the table.【close-up】the time which the watch shows is 10:10 am.
【The shot flash back to the room】
“Dad, what time is it?” Daniel stopped playing the train and asked his father .
“It’s 10.”His father answered and keep working on the sketch without checking the watch.
“I see!” Daniel said and go back to the train.
【close-up】The time which the watch shows turns to 10:30.
【The scene shifted to the room】
“What time is it?Dad?” Daniel stopped playing the train and asked his father again .
“It’s 10.”His father answered and still keep working on the sketch without checking the watch.
“Why always 10?” Daniel is not satisfied with the answer.
The father stopped working and turned around to looked at Daniel and said:“You are just a little boy, no work, no school , and no dating with girls, whyyou paid so much attention to the time?”
“I just want to grown up on time, I don’t want to be late, Dad.” Daniel answered.
After Daniel answered the question, The father is shocked, he looked at Daniel with no words.
“What \\\'s up?Dad?” Daniel asked.
“wait a moment , Dad Will be right back!”The father said to Daniel and rush out of the door.
【The shot flash】The father come back , and he put a very cute cartoon style Enland watch【close-up】on Daniel’s arm.
【The shot flash back to the room】
“Enland will help you!”The father said to Daniel.
“Help me what?grown up on time?” Daniel asked.
“Not only on time, but also in style!”The fathe answered.
【The scene shifted to a classroom】Daniel has grown into a teenager ( about 11 or 12 years old).
“May I have a date with you after school tomorrow?” Daniel asked the girl who names Jenny sitting beside him.
“If you can hit a home run in the baseball game tomorrow, I would go to see the movie with you at 4 pm. You have my word. ” Jenny answered.
“It’s a deal. ” Daniel said.
【The scene shifted to the Baseball field】The competition is fierce. Daniel hit the ball as hard as he could. 【close-up】The ball is flying in the sky, very high and very far away.
【The shot flash back to the Baseball field】Daniel is running very fast, finally he get to the base before the fielders pass the ball back. The audience cheered . Daniel raised the hand and checking the watch. 【close-up】Enland sport watch Of exquisite fashion for young people. The time which the watch shows is 3:30 pm.
【The shot flash back to the Baseball field】Daniel raised his hands and cheered:“This is the first home run in my life! just on time!”
【The scene shifted to a campus of a university】Daniel become a young man, he is standing in the campus with the academic dress and talking to his father through the cellphone.
“Graduation ceremony will start at 9:30. wil you be on time?Dad?”
【The scene shifted to the highway】Daniel’s father is talking to his son over the cellphone when he is driving .
“Don’t worry, son ,I’ll make it on time.” The father said.
【The shot flash back to the campus】Daniel is waiting fretfully. He is looking at the road all the time and checking the watch frequently. Suddenly, a red sport car is driving at speed along to him and Stopped at his side. And then Daniel’s father get off the car with □□ile. Daniel is pleasantly surprised and checking the watch. 【close-up】A Enland watch, style for students, brief And Natural.
【The shot flash back】“You\\\'re right on time.” Daniel happily said to his father.
“It’s a gift for you. Congratulations on your graduation ! You\\\'re right on time too. Daniel’s father threw the car key to Daniel. Daniel Instinct to caught the key and is so Surprised.
“wow!” Daniel said.
【The scene shifted to a church】A weeding party is going to start. All gusts are arrived, the Prist is ready,Daniel (the bridegroom) is ready, all that is needed is The bride. Daniel is waiting for the bride so fretfully, he check the watch all the time.The gusts are whispering to each other.
Suddenly the door of the church is opened, the bride who is wearing a beautiful weeding dress is just running into the church. Daniel’s facial expression turns to relieved. The bride running to his side and they happen to coincide checked the watch. 【close-up】A noble and refined Enland Matching watch.
【The shot flash back】The bridegroom and the bride are gazing at each other so lovingly and said :“just on time.” with one voice.
【The scene shifted to a hospital】Daniel’s son was born. 【The shot flash back】The baby became three years old. Daniel put a very cute watch in sunflower style on the baby’s arm and said: 【The scene switch often from Daniel and baby to the close-up of the watch.】 “ The bright color of Enland will supports your visual development. It would make a soft sound if you Wave it gently. It’s Enland, Remember ,My baby! Enland will help you grow up on time and in style ,you’ll never be late, never be out , just like me!
【close-up】Classical style of Enland watch. A words are typed with following the tick of the watch and the female voice—over: Pay attention to each step of your growth. Eland watch always to be with you.
(译文)
漂亮的房子,明亮而又温暖的房间。
Daniel(一个三岁左右的美国男孩儿)正在地板上玩电动火车,他的设计师爸爸正在他旁边的桌子上画图纸。一款庄重典雅的男士手表(产品)放在桌角,手表显示时间为10点10分。
“爸爸,几点了?” Daniel突然停止了玩儿电动火车并问爸爸。
“10点。”爸爸回答,并没有看表,而是继续画着图纸。
“哦,知道了。” Daniel回答,并低下头继续玩儿电动火车。
***
手表的显示时间变成了10点30分。
“几点了?爸爸?” Daniel再一次停止了玩电动火车并问爸爸。
“10点。”爸爸回答,仍然没有看表,仍然继续画着图纸。
“为什么老是10点?” Daniel对爸爸的回答表示出不满。
爸爸这才停下手里的工作转过身望着Daniel说道:“Daniel,你不用上班也不用上学,更不用跟女生约会,你干嘛总是操心时间呢?”
“我想准时长大,我不想长晚了,爸爸!” Daniel回答。
听了Daniel的回答,爸爸很是震惊,他望着Daniel竟说不出话来。
“你怎么了?爸爸?” Daniel问。
“稍等一下,爸爸去去就回。”爸爸对Daniel说道,说完便急匆匆地出了门。
【镜头一闪】爸爸回来了,他把一块可爱的儿童卡通款式手表(产品)【切入特写】带在儿子的手腕上。
【镜头闪回房间】
“英伦会帮助你的!”爸爸对Daniel说道。
“帮助我准时长大吗?” Daniel问。
“不仅会帮助你准时长大,还会帮助你体面地长大!”爸爸回答。
【镜头切换到一间教室】Daniel已成长为一个大约十一二岁的少年。
“明天放学后我能和你约会吗?Jenney?” Daniel问坐在他身边的名叫Jenney的女生。
“如果明天的棒球比赛你能打出一个全垒打,我就跟你去看下午四点的电影,我向你保证!” Jenney回答。
“一言为定!”Daniel说道。
【画面切换到棒球赛晨比赛正在激烈进行,Daniel挥棒重重地击出一球。
【切入特写】球在空中飞,飞得又高又远。
【镜头闪回棒球赛晨Daniel飞速奔跑,终于在野手把球传回之前跑回本垒。全场欢呼沸腾,Daniel抬起手腕看了看表。【切入特写】精美时尚的青少年运动款手表(产品)。
【镜头闪回棒球赛晨Daniel兴奋地高高跳起并举着手臂大喊:“我人生的第一个全垒打,太准时了!”
【画面切换到一所大学校园】已经成长为青年的Daniel身着学位服正在用手机跟父亲通话。
“爸爸,毕业典礼就要开始了,您能准时赶到吗?” Daniel在电话中问道。
【画面切换到高速公路】Daniel的父亲一边开车一边用手机跟Daniel通话。
“别担心,我会准时赶到的!”父亲答道。
【镜头闪回校园】Daniel焦急地等待着,一边不停地朝路上张望一边不时地看表。忽然一辆崭新的红色跑车飞驰而来,并唰地一下停在Daniel的身边,接着Daniel的父亲微笑着从车上下来。Daniel惊喜地看了看手表。【切入特写】简洁大方的学生款(产品)。
【镜头闪回】
“您很准时,爸爸!” Daniel高兴地说。
“你也很准时,儿子!”爸爸一边说一边把把手里的汽车钥匙啪地一下扔给了儿子,Daniel本能地伸手接住。
“送给你的,祝贺你准时毕业!”爸爸笑着说。
“哇!”Daniel不禁发出惊喜的叫声。
【画面切换到一所教堂】一场婚礼正准备开始,宾客都已到场,牧师已经准备好了,新郎Daniel也准备好了,现在只缺少新娘了。新郎不停地看手表,焦急地等待着新娘,宾客们在窃窃私语。就在这时教堂的们突然打开了,身穿婚纱的美丽新娘从门外跑了进来,Daniel的脸上现出如释重负的神情。新娘一直跑到了新郎的身边,新郎和新娘不约而同地看了看腕上的手表。【切入特写】高贵典雅的情侣款手表(产品)【镜头闪回】新郎和新娘深情地相视而笑,异口同声地说:“很准时!”
【镜头切换到一所医院】Daniel的儿子降生。【镜头一闪】婴儿已有三岁。Daniel把一款可爱的太阳花造型的婴儿款手表(产品)带在宝宝的手腕上并用温柔的声音对宝宝说:【画面在Daniel,宝宝和产品特写之间不停地来回切换】“它鲜艳的色彩,对你的视力发育有益。轻轻一摇它,它还会发出温和的声音,这对你的听力发育会很有帮助。宝贝,记住哦,它叫英伦,从现在开始它会一直陪着你,它会帮助你准时而又体面地长大,就像爸爸一样!有了它你永远也不会迟到,也永远不会失去体面!
【切入特写】英伦经典款手表,随着秒针的跳动,屏幕上打出一行字,同时画外音(男生)响起:关注你成长的每一步,英伦手表一直和你在一起!
做完英文故事脚步的陈述,我忍不住看了看大家,然后又用沉着而又镇定的语气接着说道:
“以上是本案的英文故事脚本,在这个故事脚本中反复强调了两个关键词—— on time和 in style,因为这两个词无论对手表而言还是对人的成长而言都至关重要。试想,一款手表,如果做不到on time,说明这是一款质量不过关的手表,如果做不到in style,则说明这是一款不入流的手表。而对于人的成长而言这两个词也同样关键,如果一个人在成长的过程中总是做不到on time和in style,那说明他的人生陷入了一种不是late就是out的境地,我相信没有人愿意让自己的人生陷入这样的境地。
本案用on time和in style这两个关键词在英伦手表和人的成长之间建立了一种自然而亲密的联系,这种联系让英伦手表非常贴切又非常紧密地嵌入了人生的成长之中,就好像一颗宝石被完美地嵌入了贵重金属一样,它们的结合意味着它们将要共赴命运的征途,将要共同演绎一段生动璀璨的故事。宝石因有了贵重金属的依托而被定位于价格不菲的首饰,英伦手表因为有了人生成长的依托而被定位于成长的忠实伙伴或是永不背信弃义的朋友,于是英伦手表被赋予了在人性关怀层面上的价值与意义。而成长的忠实伙伴——永不背信弃义的朋友正是我想通过我们的广告在目标客户心中为英伦品牌建立的目标形象!
本案截取了人生当中几个重要时刻的重要场景来表达人的成长,而这个表达是需要时间的。克里奥大奖的参赛规则是参赛广告的时长不得超过180妙,我们小组在跟制作部做了充分的沟通之后初步估算本案用时大约在120秒至150秒之间,这肯定是符合参赛要求的。问题是作为投放到市场的广告,它的用时显然太长了,这样无形中会大大增加客户的广告成本。
我的想法是把这个广告做成一个系列,就像是电视连续剧一样,头和尾不变,就像电视剧的片头曲和片尾曲每集都不变一样,而中间的部分可以分成四个场景在同一时段连续播出,每天播出一个场景,这样不仅可以保持广告的新鲜感,还不会让人感觉审美疲劳,另外也会吸引人看下去,因为人们想知道Daniel的全部成长历程!当然了,当所有的场景都播完之后,重复是不可避免的,但是这种循环性的重复绝对不会像其他广告的简单重复那么无趣和单调。虽然这么做多少有点冒险,但是我认为创新精神永远是文明进步的最大推动力。如果本案能够通过审核,那么我们面临的最大挑战就是说服客户接受这个崭新的创意。
另外关于故事的主角Daniel的名字我想做一下特别的说明,Daniel 来源于希伯来语,名字的含义是:\\\"上帝为我们的裁决者\\\"。Daniel被形容为英俊强壮的美国童子军,是喜好运动,勇敢,友善,值得信赖,教养良好,聪明且随和的人。它是一个很大众化的男生英文名。在去年出生于美国的男孩中,该名流行度排名第5位。在英国它是流行度排名第8的英文名,在加拿大的排名是第17。Daniel作为男生英文名,在美国从未像现在这样流行过。本案之所以给故事的主角取名为Daniel,一是因为这个名字跟故事的情节以及人物特征都十分吻合,二是因为该产品目前主打的是北美市场,而这个名字当下在北美很受青睐。
为了节省大家的时间,关于市场分析以及如何做市场突围的部分我就不讲了,这个策划书中都有,大家自己看吧。其实,在座的都是行家,听完了我刚刚陈述的故事脚本,大家对于本案的市场突围的攻击节点应该已经了然于胸了,也不需要我再啰嗦什么了。
以上就是我们英伦手表策划案的第二套提案,恭请各位审核。
当我说完这最后一句话时,我听见会议室里响起了雷鸣般的掌声。